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Two POV's
Published on February 19, 2007 By dynamaso In Writing
The terrain was flat, barren and dry. Great tables rose in the distance, but offered very little shade on the flatlands. The air buzzed with electricity and savage winds often swept across the plains, making it hard for the scouting party to maintain their direction.

They had left the main group days earlier, on a mission for signs of sustenance. They had stumbled over a small ridge down onto the plain in vain hope of finding something, anything.

The head scout urged his party on. They were all tired, but their leader knew if they stopped, they’d be hard to start again. And he needed for this mission to be successful. If not, they were potentially all doomed.

Sometime later, one of the left flank let the leader know he’d found a small deposit of something which could be used to sustain them until they found a richer source. The head scout checked the source and then called the party together. There was enough food to go around, although it was dry and hardly tasty. But it wasn’t poisonous and it would keep them going.

As soon as the meal was complete, the head scout pushed his team on again. Suddenly, the ground started rumbling and shaking the team off their legs. Scrambling around, both flanks began to panic. The head scout tried to keep them calm but the scouts were tired, scared and missing home.

A gigantic beast appeared on the near horizon, panicking them even further. Suddenly a great device swept down, picking up the entire left flank and sweeping them back towards a great ridge that had dropped from the sky. The team leader attempted to leave a note for future teams but lost the chance as he too was swept up and away.
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“Honey, there are ants in the kitchen again.”

“Well, sweep ‘em up and toss ‘em out.”

“But they keep coming back in. You said you’d do something about it the last time they got in.”

“Oh, for God’s sake, they’re only ants. They won’t eat much.”

“I don’t want them in my kitchen, you hear?”

“Yes dear…”

“And don’t be so condescending.”

“Yes, dear.”

“I mean it…”

“I know.”

Comments (Page 1)
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on Feb 19, 2007
HAHA! DUH! It took me a second to "get it!" VERY WELL DONE Maso! hahahaha!!!!    

on Feb 19, 2007
  

That was great.
on Feb 19, 2007
Shovel,

VERY WELL DONE Maso! hahahaha


Glad it gave you a laugh, mate.

Tex,

That was great


Thanks... Glad you liked it too. And it is good to see you as well.
on Feb 19, 2007
excellent...I never saw the other pov coming.
on Feb 19, 2007
I read it backwards and it was still funny! You are totally insane maso! Thank you!

(ps. try diatomaceous earth, tears their little guts apart - I know, you probably couldn't harm a flea)
on Feb 19, 2007
Kelly,

Excellent


Thank you, m'am. I started writing the second bit first, then the first bit came to me. I thought it would twist people's heads if I reversed them. And it did. Glad you enjoyed it.

Don,

You are totally insane maso! Thank you!


Woo hoo... You get my 'Well-spotted' Award. You're the first JoeUser to recognise my talent comes from my insanity Thank YOU.

As you rightly guessed, the Buddhist in me doesn't really like to kill 'em.

on Feb 19, 2007
cute - I was picturing some cowboys out on the range
on Feb 19, 2007
yee-haw!

on Feb 19, 2007
Locamama,

I was picturing some cowboys out on the range


Yeah, I kinda hoped it might suck a few of you in to believing it to be something like cowboys. Still, I'm pleased you liked it.

Shovel,

Phew, that fella would certainly add a new meaning to 'ants in ya pants'...
on Feb 19, 2007
    
on Feb 20, 2007
Wow Mark, that was unexpectedly great! I didn't see it coming at all! That was pretty smart and good writing!
on Feb 20, 2007
Serenity,

pretty smart and good writing


Thanks...
on Feb 21, 2007
Soon as I started reading your article I knew what it was about. I think it's because I read everything you write. Hey, even a broken clock is right twice a day.

Despite knowing, I did enjoy it. It makes me wonder why I can't think of things like that. Keep up the good work.
on Feb 21, 2007
Chris,

Soon as I started reading your article I knew what it was about


Cool... Hey great minds think alike, mate. I know there is another part to the saying, but neither you nor I are fools (well, at least I like to think so   )

I did enjoy it


Thanks, I glad you did.
on Feb 23, 2007

Sorry for getting here late.

Awesome.

Didn't see it coming!  No wonder you picked this as a topic....its a great idea!

 

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